Parachutes to Planets
1.) Comma (series and unnecessary), Using the right word
Original Sentence
The parachute was used in 1783 to save people, whom had to jump from burning buildings high towers and other dangerous places.
Corrected Sentence
The parachute was used in 1783 to save people who had to jump from burning buildings, high towers, and other dangerous places.
2.) Using the right word, numbers, spelling
Original Sentence
Earth moves threw space 8 times faster than a speeding bullit.
Corrected Sentence
Earth moved through space eight times faster than a speeding bullet.
3.) Using the Right Word, Numbers, Comma (to separate phrases and clauses), Capitalization
Original Sentence
At one time someone in the united states dyed of Cancer every ninety seconds.
Corrected Sentence
At one time, someone in the United States died of cancer every 90 seconds.
4.) Using the Right Word, Wordy Sentence
Original Sentence
Cold water is heavier then hot water and weighs more as well.
Corrected Sentence
Cold water is heavier than hot water.
5.) Capitalization, Subject-verb Agreement, Comma (to separate adjectives), colon
Original Sentence
The flat wide rings of saturn is thin less than two miles thick.
Corrected Sentence
The flat, wide rings of Saturn are thin: less than two miles thick.
TEST - Slow Falling
Comma (series, to separate phrases and clauses, and to separate adjectives), colon, Using the Right Word, Spelling
Original Paragraph
Though people experamented with parachutes hundreds of years ago the first known parachute jump was made by a Frenchman in 1783. Since the development of air travel parachutes have been used for other reasons escaping from damaged aircraft dropping troops and supplies into war zones and delivering emergency food and medicine too people who are in need. Today, some thrill seekers can wear parachutes just for fun - in the daring high-flying sport of skydiving.
Corrected Paragraph
Though people experimented with parachutes hundreds of years ago, the first known parachute jump was made by a Frenchman in 1783. Since the development of air travel, parachutes have been used for other reasons: escaping from damaged aircraft, dropping troops and supplies into war zones, and delivering emergency food and medicines to people who are in need. Today, some thrill seekers may wear parachutes just for fun - in the darling, high-flying sport of skydiving.
